Memo

To: Mrs. Moody
From: Samantha Salerno

Based on the peer review, I'm doing a good job on indicating the main point of my memoir as well as engaging the reader. The detail of the introduction is portrayed to its fullest and the description of my family and the hotel is written effectively. According to my peer, everything that I tried for the reader to gain while reviewing this memoir was gained, which is good. In the review, my peer suggested that I should describe my family's reaction a little more when we find out about my uncle's death. I plan on doing so later in the memoir. The way I want to set up the memoir is to start with the introduction when we get to the hotel and abruptly find out about my uncle's death. Then, I want to jump back in time and explain who my uncle was and what he meant to my family and I. I'm going to finish up the memoir by continueing from where I left off in the introduction by explaining the rest of the story (including my family's reactions which is what my peer wanted me to talk about, how he died, us driving home, us getting home, etc.). I then want to close the memoir by showing how signifigant this event was in my life, and how looking back on it now, the things that didn't make sense to me when it happened do make sense to me now. I'll be able to reflect on how I was feeling and how I feel about it all now. By doing so, it'll make the feel of the memoir come full circle which seems to be the point of writing about these types of events.